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2019
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1. At Kiwi can I learn about Self control On Wednesday 2019 term 2.And I saw a junior Fighting So I Use Self-control To stop the fighting at school So they Don’t Get in Trouble from the Teacher and From their parents.
2. On kiwi can I use Leadership at home because my sister is only 7. If she wants some Lollies I Be a Role Model to my Sister and if she gets Bullied at school I will tell my sister to go to the brothers if they Seniors if That is.
3. At kiwi can I learn about Goal setting is Maths And Swimming. So I can be an expert at swimming and Really brainy at maths That’s why kiwi can is the best In the world.
4. Why is kiwi can is amazing?. You have lots of fun Like Outside games inside games And what’s really fun is G.k.q and what the best thing it’s on Wednesday 10:10am First block but kiwi can is Amazing.
dequarncps18
September 12, 2019 at 9:05 am (5 years ago)Grate work jahaday the thing i liked ab out your work is how you talk about what kiwi can do for us
one thing i think you need to work on is making it a bit more sence
sarinacps19
September 25, 2019 at 9:38 am (5 years ago)Nice work Jahday, one thing I like about your writing, is that you would be a role model and how you use self-control when a fight is happening. But one thing I think you need to work on, is to re-read and re-edit because I can see some sentence that doesn’t make sense.